Second Draft
The moment I opened my eyes from a long sleep I remembered it was my first day of school. I jamped out of my bed feeling so excited to start my first day at school. I had left all my friends from Kindergarten but I knew I was going to see them again before long when they turned five.
“Its going to fun on your first day of school” my sister said. I felt like I was going to explode from all the excitement inside of me.
I changed in to my uniform as fast as I could. Chucked on my shoes and rushed to get my bag and after breakfast my mum happily yelled out “ Are you ready for your first day of school” I replied “YES” in the most exciting way. Then off my mother and I whent. As soon as we stepped foot out of the house I grabbed my mom's hand and pulled her along the footpath.
Walking through the school gate’s I could see kids coming from everywhere as if they were a herd of animals. They all looked like little red dots. Hearing the laughter of everyone made me smile.
I played until the bell rang. When the bell did ring my mum took me to class but as I walked into class everyone stared at me like I had done something wrong. I sat down beside a five year old girl. My my new teacher was Miss Gorge she was very kind and helpful.
First Draft
On the first day of school I was determined and excited to start. I changed in to my uniform as fast as I could and rushed to get my bag and of my mother and I went. As soon as we stepped foot out of the house I grabbed my mom's hand and pulled her along the footpath. As I thought to myself “This is going to be fun”.
Walking to school I could see kids coming from everywhere as if they were a herd of animals. They all looked like little red dots. Hearing the laughter of everyone made me smile. When the bell had rang. My mum took me to class but as I walked into class everyone stared at me like I had done something wrong.
I sat down beside a five year old girl named Gianna she was my new friend. My teacher was Miss Gorge she was very kind and helpful.